it sounds like youve taken it from the big book of personal statements!
take out the last sentence - that belongs on your covering letter.
take out or re-word "while i consider my options" ... sounds like you wont be commited to the company, and your planning to leave before you start.
also, take out "that satisfies my work ethic" ... makes you sound like a pious lunatic who'll turn down any offers given to you. it's great that you have ethics, but keep them in your head - dont put them on your cv.
Your CV is meant to sell you to a potential employer. In the statement above, you have two points that raise alarm bells BEFORE anyone has read anything else about you! let alone interviewed you!
This is a great start, but it needs some re-working
A critical aspect of creating a CV that has a dynamic impact is writing a personal statement, sometimes called a profile or career summary that will enable the recruiter to quickly identify the strategic value you can add to their organization. Your CV should be a self-marketing document aimed at persuading the recruiter to want to interview you and your personal statement is a critical part of making this happen.
Many candidates struggle with writing the statement part of their CV but it doesn't necessarily have to be a difficult as you may think. A well written statement can be between 50 and 200 words, although it is important not to ramble. Remember you always have your cover letter to include interesting and engaging information which will act as the gateway to them then wanting to read your CV.
For example an opening statement without the opening 'I' could read:
As a highly-motivated and results orientated manager within the luxury hotel sector, I have a proven track record of providing exemplary levels of service to a broad range of guests, including VIPs and high-profile individuals.
Key points on writing a dynamic and interesting personal statement:
Get straight to the point: avoid lengthy descriptions and make your testimonies punchy and informative.
Keep it between 50 to 200 words maximum.
If you have enough space, use 1.5 line spacing to make you statement easier to read.
Match person and job specifications with well written copy.
Read your profile out loud to ensure it reads naturally.
Don't mix first and third person sentences.
''any employment that suits my work ethnic'' - do you mean ethic? It's fine, but really it's just the usual dribble that everyone else puts so who really gives a shi.t? Realistically, they will reply to your CV based on if your qualifications and experience is impressive/up to their standards, so, if that's in order then this'll compliment it fine - IF you fix that typo.
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so far I have I am a hard working and reliable person who is willing to learn new skills and complete challenges.I work well as part of a group or as an individual, and would like to think of myself as being friendly and considerate to those around me.I'm a enthusiastic team player seeking any employment that satisfies my work ethnic and allows me to gain new experience and support me while I consider my options and continue my studies.I would also appreciate the opportunity to work at your company.
